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Discord's Revenge 5 by ViralJP Discord's Revenge 5 by ViralJP
Twilight Sparkle (c) Hasbro
Princess Luna (c) Hasbro
Princess Celestia (c) Hasbro
Spike (c) Hasbro
Cheerilee (c) Hasbro
Apple Bloom (c) Hasbro
Sweetie Belle (c) Hasbro
Scootaloo (c) Hasbro
Discord (c) Hasbro
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic (c) Hasbro
(c) :iconfyre-flye:

After meeting with the Cutie Mark Crusaders and their unfortunate teacher, Princess Luna, along with her now younger sister Princess Celestia, leads the way to the library. She hopes to find Twilight Sparkle and the rest of the ponies in order to defeat Discord. As the group approached the library entrance, they hear some loud noises coming from inside. They were puzzled as to what could be happening. When they entered, the group was rather surprised to what was occurring.

Spike: Twilight it's me, Spike! *chasing after the filly Twilight*
Twilight Sparkle: GO AWAY! *throws books at Spike*
Spike: Just listen to me! *blocking the oncoming books*
Twilight Sparkle: NO!!!

The group saw Spike trying to calm a now filly Twilight.

Apple Bloom: Twilight!?
Spike: *sees the others* You guys gotta help with... *notices Luna, Celestia, and Cheerilee*
Spike: Princess Luna! Princess Celestia and Cheerilee too!?
Sweetie Belle: What's wrong with Twilight?
Spike: I don't know! When she came to the library, I found her like this and she doesn't remember me!
Scootaloo: What are we waiting for!? Come on, let's help Spike and see if we can help Twilight snap out of it!
Apple Bloom: Let's go girls!

The crusaders try to grab hold of Twilight, but they underestimated their chances of catching the filly. Twilight began climbing the book shelves to avoid capture.

Sweetie Belle: Twilight get down! You'll hurt yourself!
Twilight Sparkle: Leave me alone! *throws books at the crusaders*
Apple Bloom: Please Twilight! We wanna help you!
Twilight Sparkle: I said...

But before she could finish, Twilight began losing hold of shelf and fell along with dozens of books.

Twilight Sparkle: AAAAHHHH!!!! *falling but was stopped in mid-air by Luna's magic*
The Crusaders: AAHHH! *piles of books fall upon the crusaders, but thankfully no major injuries*

Princess Luna: Stand aside, I shall aid thee in your trouble with the young filly. *sets Celestia to the side*
Twilight Sparkle: *starts crying* Don't hurt me.
Princess Luna: Do not fear me young one. I am here to give back what was lost. *her horn begins conjure magic*

Luna places her horn onto Twilight's forehead as her magic begins to take effect. Within mere seconds, Twilight's memories and experiences were once more revitalized. Her magic slowly yet steadily returned to her, and her cutie mark appeared again. However, Luna's magic was not strong enough to counter the effect of the time magic that was cast upon the young student by Discord. Nevertheless, Twilight managed to regain her memories and magic.

Twilight Sparkle: Ugh... what's going on? *dazed from the spell*
Spike: Twilight? *goes to her aid while carrying Celestia*
Twilight Sparkle: Spike? *then notices Luna and the crusaders, as well as Celestia and Cheerilee* Wait a minute, Princess Luna? Apple Bloom? Sweetie Belle? Scootaloo? *gasp* Princess Celestia and Cheerilee!?
Apple Bloom: Are you girls alright?
Sweetie Belle: Ungh... I've been better. *pops up with a dictionary on top of her head*
Scootaloo: Same here.
Princess Celestia: *looks at Twilight with curiousness*
Cheerilee: Ababa!
Twilight Sparkle: This is some kind of dream?
Princess Luna: I'm afraid not.

*Luna informs Twilight about everything that's been happening*

Twilight Sparkle: Discord's behind all of this!?
Princess Luna: He is. Thou does not remember any knowledge of his involvement?
Twilight Sparkle: I can't remember all that well. The last things that I remember before my memories went blank were running back to town from some open field. I also recall seeing the others, but barely noticing them from afar. They all looked disoriented from the looks on their faces. Other than that, I don't know much else.
Princess Luna: Very well, in either case we must find the other ponies and retrieve the elements of harmony if we'll have any chance against Discord.
Spike: But how will we find them if their memory was affected like Twilight's? *concerned while carrying Celestia*
Princess Luna: With all of us, thou has a greater chance in finding the other ponies. Once they're found, I shall bring the elements of harmony and together we shall defeat Discord.

Nearby, a book opens up and the face of Discord appears once again while no pony notices.

Discord: Well, now that the gang is all here, it's time to get things started.
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:iconasluc96:
I think this piece got everything! Such a good idea, concept, art, story indeed
Some parts of it sounded to me like if it could be in a real episode, I wonder what will happen at the end

The drawing style is amazing, filly Twilight and the babies are so damn cute, I still wonder if appears another one...

Nothing much to say, well done my brony. But only one thing... This is getting so good and exciting, please keep up the good work here, is getting too interesting, and even more adorable :aww:

Well that's all, please don't let us down! :thumbsup:
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First off, the picture is 100% perfect.

Second, I loved the story. I was reading through my messages and saw this. I took one glance at it and was almost ready to pass by until I stopped and read the first line. And I couldn't stop. It was perfect. It caught the my (the reader) attention for just a mere second and then I was hooked.

The story line is something that could catch anyones attention wether its a kid, teenager or adult. I makes me want to read more stories like this that are out there in the world and I hope you do continue this story because I believe it would be simply amazing.

Great job!
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:iconskythekids:
skythekids Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014
clestia main was pink
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:iconkinleyleah:
kinleyleah Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Student Photographer
Hehehe
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:icongaybiez:
gaybiez Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love all of Discord's disguises.
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:iconchrismilesprower:
Chrismilesprower Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Awwwwwwwwww.
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:icon1elementofhope:
1Elementofhope Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Spy Discord
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:iconisabelle-fox:
Isabelle-fox Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012
poor Spike, he must of had an interesting time trying to explain to Twilight what was going on, before the others there.
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:iconcatlovervick:
CatLoverVick Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
AAHWWW CELESTIA LOOKS SOOO KAWAII <33
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:iconmakenna-firecracker:
Makenna-Firecracker Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
IMMA WRITE A FANFIC FOR THIS!
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:iconkattayle:
KatTayle Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It looks like Celestia noticed the book :)
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:iconbubblesrocksandrolls:
How cute make me cry of cuteness
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:iconlyokian:
lyokian Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012
Okay one down, and five to go.
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:iconepona92:
Epona92 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012
This needs to be an episode
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:iconalditora:
alditora Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I agree
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:iconschnood:
Schnood Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2012  Student Filmographer
lock the book
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:iconspartan545:
Spartan545 Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2012  Student General Artist
Jersey Devil: The Staff indicates that Discord is somewhere close by.

Staff of Equestria: You can capture Discord and return him to the Statue of himself. I feel a presence along with Discord, a Baby Dralicorn, your son.

Jersey Devil: (Angry) THATS IT, HE'S GONE TOO FAR!! HE MAY CAUSE CHAOS, BUT WHEN HE TURNS CELESTIA INTO A BABY, AND TAKES MY SON, THAT WAS OVER THE LINE!!!!

Discord: Well, now that the gang is all here, it's time to get things started.
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:icondarthwill3:
DarthWill3 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh man, this is too cute! Look at little Twiliy and the Crusaders!
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:iconalexwarlorn:
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner May 19, 2012
When did Twilight get her cutie mark back?
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:iconviraljp:
ViralJP Featured By Owner May 20, 2012
Luna casted a spell that helped Twilight regain her memories and her magical expertise. The spell also allowed her cutie mark to appear.
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:iconalexwarlorn:
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner May 20, 2012
Okay. How did she get separated from her friends? (Sorry for my cruddy memory.)
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:iconviraljp:
ViralJP Featured By Owner May 20, 2012
The mane six slowly drifted away from one another without even knowing. It's somewhat implied that the mane six's memories were beginning to fade away given Twilight's murky recollection. She said that she remembered being with the other ponies, but once Discord turn them into young fillies her memory of everything else at that time was a blur. The only thing that she did remember was seeing the other ponies go to different directions from the open field.
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:iconalexwarlorn:
alexwarlorn Featured By Owner May 20, 2012
Twilight of course, still has the fact she's a child working against her, not just a physical limit, but it could also still effect her emotions.
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:iconshad-23:
ShaD-23 Featured By Owner May 2, 2012
It's getting awesome. The story is really coming along creat. Waiting for the next part :thumbsup:;)
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:iconannlay:
AnnLay Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012
I'm working on a critique, but wanted to post this:
Make MORE! I love them!
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:iconannehairball:
AnneHairball Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012  Student General Artist
Cutest revenge ever
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:iconsjstansbury:
SJStansbury Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is getting very interesting
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:icongeno-the-slakoth:
Geno-the-Slakoth Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2012  Student Artist
I DICTIONARY on Sweetie Belle's head?! :iseewhatyoudidthereplz:
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:iconbladergirl101:
BladerGirl101 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2012   General Artist
I like this :)
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:iconswanlullaby:
SwanLullaby Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
good job!
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:iconjoebrony:
JoeBrony Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012
This is really interesting, keep it up :thumbsup:
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:iconarashi93-sama:
Arashi93-sama Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012
:iconmoarcrabsplz:
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:iconkisa94:
Kisa94 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Is this going to be a story?! i want more~!
:iconfinallyplz:
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:iconzarinebashire:
ZarineBashire Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
They are so cute as babies. Love it!
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:iconbb-k:
BB-K Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeap, all for being out of control. :(
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:icontheshizirl:
Theshizirl Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012
Baby Celestia: *cries* (is hungry)
Luna: Oh, Tia! Is thou hungry?
Baby Celestia: *nods*
Luna: We see. (Throws bottle out window) *trollface*
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:iconlaw1st:
law1st Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012  Professional General Artist
HELL JES!
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:iconnewestanimefan:
newestanimefan Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012
Very well made, and has a fascinating story behind it.
Luna and spike look exactly like in the show, it's awesome!
All in all, a very nice picture and story that fit each other perfectly!
Will this be a continuing story?
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:iconviraljp:
ViralJP Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012
Thanks, it takes a while to get the designs right. The same goes for the story too. I will be making more parts in the near future.
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:iconnewestanimefan:
newestanimefan Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012
Okay! Sounds good, and great job so far ;D
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:icondiscourt:
Discourt Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Discord what have you done? XD
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:iconglitchyproductions:
GlitchyProductions Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Another idea for me to write down in Sands of Time.

Nice image, your art and design is getting better as you go along starting from the first Revenge image.
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:iconviraljp:
ViralJP Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012
Thanks, the designs are becoming a little easier to create in comparison to way back then.

Looking forward to the next parts of Sands of Time.
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:iconrichforce:
Richforce Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012
Nice job.
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:iconviraljp:
ViralJP Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012
Thanks.
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:iconitachi-prower:
Itachi-Prower Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012  Student General Artist
Oh noes! 8X not discord!!! BTW! Awesome work! ^_^
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:iconviraljp:
ViralJP Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012
Yup, it's that dastardly Discord! Thanks a bunch.
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:iconitachi-prower:
Itachi-Prower Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012  Student General Artist
anytime! ^^
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:iconthunder-bolt:
Thunder-Bolt Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012
This is getting good. Nice work:thumbsup:
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:iconviraljp:
ViralJP Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012
Thank you.
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:iconthunder-bolt:
Thunder-Bolt Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2012
You're welcome.
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:iconteyandee05:
Teyandee05 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012
So, it is up to Luna to help Twilight to defeat Discord. Let us wish them good luck! Everything should be restored to normal as soon as possible.
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